Peer Review Day! ~ Red, Yellow, Orange

Peer Review Sheet

Avoid one word responses (yes, no,etc)

Writer:
Paper Title:
Evaluator:

1. What are the strengths of the paper? What about the paper works well?

2. Does the title fit the essay? Why or Why not? Suggestions?

3. Does the introduction grab the reader’s attention? Why or Why not? Suggestions?

4. What is the author’s thesis? Does the paper support the thesis? Explain.

5. Is the draft effectively organized? Could it be organized differently? Suggestions?

6. Are the paragraphs unified? Are there clear topic sentences? Does every sentence in the paragraph support the topic sentence? Are there clear, effective transitions? Suggestions?

7. Is the conclusion effective? Does it adequately conclude the essay? Suggestions?

8. Where would the paper benefit from additional support and examples?

9. Does the author appropriately address the audience? Are the voice and tone appropriate for the audience? Why or why not? Suggestions?


10. Make two suggestions for the next draft.

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While you make corrections on your next draft for Thursday, make sure you address the following questions:

• What do the video games look like? What can you do in this video game? How does one video game look different from another? Describe in enough detail that your reader can picture it, but be careful not to turn this into a descriptive essay—this is an analytical essay, and analysis should be the focus of your writing.

• Who is the intended or “target” audience/How do you know? What has the game creator assumed about the audience? What type of action does the creator of the game want you to do after you are done playing the game?

• What claims are the video games making and are they the same claims? Is the claim implicit or explicit or are both claims represented? (implicit = not told outright, explicit = told in the text).

• Are there any possible opposing opinions to the claim that the virtual video game is making? Do the “villains” or “adversaries” in the game have alternative viewpoints that are relevant or reliable? Does the virtual video game address any of those positions?

• How does the video game employ logos, ethos, pathos? What methods do they use (pictures, streaming video, interviews, citing sources, exciting movement, links)? Is the video game claim logically developed and backed up with strong, reliable evidence?

• Think of how you will conclude this essay. Could you offer an argument about the nature of video game culture? About the nature of using video games to show something other than entertainment? About the repercussions of video games in general?